Monday, March 30, 2009

a story is worth a thousand words

I am the man in the shadows my name is nick and i am getting some sauce so i can put it on the pie so it gives it the extra flavor that i like. There is 6 people and 1 dog living in the house and also working in the farm. The dogs name is Jose witch we call chavela. In this time we are going to eat dinner and the desert is pumpkin pie. after we eat dinner we also have desert and it smells so good that even if its not in your mouth you can still taste it. and the best part is the crust because its crunchy and very good tasting. My doughtier Dalia looks at my wife and sees that she is feeding the horse some pie so she wants to give some pie to the horse. The horses name is Armando he loves to eat a lot But the house is rubbing the pie in Jose's face because he is starving and probably of jumping on the table and getting the pie there. The bread on the table is called bimbo that is made by us. Then there is the two little kids that are there are Jorge witch is eating like there's no tomorrow and Luis who is probably thinking very happy thoughts because hes always thinking of the toy that is right in front of him. My grandma that i probably making something out of wood at the table is Alma. Then finally the wife is Sandra witch i am married to.
We are all eating as a family, eating the pumpkin pie that i have been waiting for all day. But my kids, my wife, the horse, and my grandma eat all the pie and left a little peace just sitting there and when i picked it up to eat it the Jose, the dog jumped up and toke the peace of pie right out of my hand. I got mad and throw Jose out of the house for a while. Then when we where outside working on the farm we all where but not my grandma but when Jose and Armando were mad at each other and Jose bit Armando "the horse" in the tail so Armando went crazy and Sandra was there. As she was watching the horse go crazy and she tryed to stop him but Armando kicked her in her face and she died right there.

6 comments:

  1. u need to put a little more at the end cruz comon

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  2. I like your story but you need to check your capital letters other then that it was good. =)

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  3. iTS GOOD AND FIX SOME ERRORS..
    DALIA

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  4. no dont fix the errors its good as it s lol
    good job cruz XD

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  5. Nice dude, I liked the story but I thought that the ending was lackluster. I know you had rush but there is always more room for improvising.

    [L7]

    P.S: can I get you hacks ppllleeeeaaassseee

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  6. I like the details.
    You could've had a better ending.

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