
I am the man in the shadows my name is nick and i am getting some
sauce so i can put it on the pie so it gives it the extra flavor that i like. There is 6 people and 1 dog living in the house and also working in the farm. The dogs name is
Jose witch we call
chavela. In this time we are going to eat dinner and the
desert is pumpkin pie. after we eat dinner we also have
desert and it smells so good that even if its not in your mouth you can still taste it. and the best part is the crust because its
crunchy and very good tasting. My
doughtier Dalia looks at my wife and sees that she is feeding the horse some pie so she wants to give some pie to the horse. The horses name is
Armando he loves to eat a lot But the house is
rubbing the pie in
Jose's face because he is starving and probably of jumping on the table and getting the pie there. The bread on the table is called bimbo that is made by us. Then there is the two little kids that are there are
Jorge witch is
eating like
there's no
tomorrow and
Luis who is probably thinking very happy thoughts because hes always thinking of the toy that is right in front of him. My grandma that i probably making something out of wood at the table is
Alma. Then finally the wife is
Sandra witch i am married to.
We are all
eating as a family,
eating the pumpkin pie that i have been
waiting for all day. But my kids, my wife, the
horse, and my grandma eat all the pie and left a little peace just sitting there and when i picked it up to eat it the
Jose, the dog jumped up and toke the peace of pie right out of my hand. I got mad and throw
Jose out of the house for a while. Then when we where outside working on the farm we all where but not
my grandma but when
Jose and
Armando were mad at each other and
Jose bit
Armando "the horse" in the tail so
Armando went crazy and
Sandra was there. As she was watching the
horse go crazy and she
tryed to stop him but
Armando kicked her in her face and she died right there.
u need to put a little more at the end cruz comon
ReplyDeleteI like your story but you need to check your capital letters other then that it was good. =)
ReplyDeleteiTS GOOD AND FIX SOME ERRORS..
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no dont fix the errors its good as it s lol
ReplyDeletegood job cruz XD
Nice dude, I liked the story but I thought that the ending was lackluster. I know you had rush but there is always more room for improvising.
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P.S: can I get you hacks ppllleeeeaaassseee
I like the details.
ReplyDeleteYou could've had a better ending.